Draft 2 Initial Feedback

I got some feedback on my second draft saying that the audio on the 'Getting to know me ep.1' clip was too distracting so I decided I would remove the audio on that clip entirely. I was also told that the clip of him standing outside of the shed felt a bit forced. I may include a clip of him talking outside of his house which would add some context and explain that he lives there. I was also told that I should add some scenes of him at work or in a kitchen because of how much he talks about it and possibly add some more cut aways because of how many of the same angle of him looking at the camera is used.

Rival Scene

To showcase Sam's rivalry for the other character I printed a picture of him and made Sam burn it with a lighter because I felt it showed his hatred of the other character. This was Sam's friend who I instructed to wear a tie around his head and pretend he was drinking because I thought it would show that he was having fun with tie reviewing in contrast with Sam who is very serious about reviewing ties.

I tried a mid-shot of Sam burning the photo but felt like it should have been closer because you couldn't see the photo very well so the meaning was slightly lost. 

This is a closer shot which I preferred because it kept everything I wanted to be in shot in shot but you could also see more details.

I also filmed some overlay footage of Sam outside of his shed because I didn't establish it as a location beforehand.

Charity Shop

I contacted a local charity shop via phone and asked if they would be okay with me filming some footage for my A-Level media project and they said it would be. This is the same charity shop I said I may film at in this blogpost

This is one of the angles which we filmed in the charity shop of him looking through some ties.

This is a screenshot of the scene we got where he was paying for his ties. I'm going to blur out the woman's face to suit the conventions of documentaries

This is a screenshot of the scene where sam was outside showing off his new ties.

Test Footage

I edited together a very rough draft with the test footage and rough logo I have recorded/designed. This shows a rough narrative structure and how I may put them together when it comes to the full thing. I wanted to test the transition for the title screen and I feel like the top to bottom push transition was very appropriate but for the final product I may change the speed of it. I also didn't edit in any music for the timelapse and the camera wasn't very steady. I'm going to look for ways to keep the camera more steady and find some appropriate music or maybe even create some. This is only the rough narrative structure and doesn't follow the storyboard as much as I want it to. I also didn't make Sam follow the script as much as he will in the final product.

Gender Representation

Sam keeps conventional to some male stereotypes because he is a typically messy character. I hope to reflect this in his shed/home. He also has facial. He isn't a very macho character so does breaks some conventions due to not being very masculine. This is based on what was seen as masculine. He doesn't fit the conventions of the action hero because although he will be a slightly aggressive character, he will not want to engage in violent behaviour. He does not fit the conventions of the big shot because he is not at all successful and doesn't have possessions that are seen as valuable by society and doesn't have very much money. The big shot is however what he aspires to be. He doesn't fit the strong silent type because he isn't very masculine and will talk about his feelings. Sam doesn't fit the stereotype of the jock because he doesn't feel the need to fight, doesn't mind being soft and isn't successful with women. He fits the character of the joker in the way that he is always looking for approval by trying to make jokes but will sometimes show his emotions and also isn't very popular. Sam does fit the character of a nerd because of his lack of confidence when it comes to social skills, his lack of masculinity. However it is clear that he isn't a smart character due to him giving up his job to pursue a very distant hard dream.

Draft Script

Link to script
This is a link to a draft script which I have developed with Sam. The shots are based on the storyboard which can be found here. We will most likely include more scenes to extend the narrative and include more about his life.

Storyboard

Creating this storyboard has given me a much better idea of how I'm going to structure my mockumentary and will help heavily when it comes to writing my script

Narrative Theory

Todorov

My mockumentary is slightly unusual but will match a typical narrative. My narrative will match Todorov's narrative theory because I intend for it to start where my protagonist is living a normal life with a decent job, but then the conflicting event will be him leaving his job. He will eventually realize that his dream is unrealistic and attempt to return to his regular life. He will then return to his normality but still continues to enjoy his ties.

Levi Strauss

My narrative will not be typical  according to Levi Strauss binary opposites theory. I may have a rival character who is more successful at tie reviewing than Sam but I'm not sure whether  will include it. There probably won't be any other binary opposites.

Barthes

My narrative will not fit Barthes' enigma code because there is no mystery to be solved.

Propp

My character doesn't fit any of Propp's characters because I wouldn't describe him as a Hero, villain, dispatcher, donor, helper, heroine or false hero. He could be seen as a very loose hero because the audience will want him to succeed, however he won't actually do anything heroic. I may also include a rival to Sam but he won't be seen as a villain because he won't really have a goal.

Freytag

My narrative will follow Freytag's pyramid because it will start at an equilibrium and then escalate when he's quit his job but then the action will fall when he attempts to get another job. An equiibrium will then be reached once he gets a normal job again

Narrative

Sam will initially be working a normal job before making a decision to leave and pursue his dream of becoming a popular tie reviewer on youtube. There will be interview with his family and co-workers which will comment on his decisions. He will move into his parents' shed and live there after being unable to support himself. Sam will go to the charity shop and meet his rival 'Danny Tied Up' and confront him. Sam will then be kicked by his parents because of his lack of money and ability to support himself. He will then be stay with one of his friends until they kick him out. Sam will return to his job once he;s realised that his dream can not be a reality. He will still run his channel along side his job but will not focus as much on it. Danny will have a successful channel at the end.