Draft 2 Initial Feedback

I got some feedback on my second draft saying that the audio on the 'Getting to know me ep.1' clip was too distracting so I decided I would remove the audio on that clip entirely. I was also told that the clip of him standing outside of the shed felt a bit forced. I may include a clip of him talking outside of his house which would add some context and explain that he lives there. I was also told that I should add some scenes of him at work or in a kitchen because of how much he talks about it and possibly add some more cut aways because of how many of the same angle of him looking at the camera is used.

Using the Music

I added the music to the background of the documentary in places where I felt it was appropriate. I used Track 1 in the background of the majority of the documentary. I added track 2 where he talks about leaving his job to show sadness. I feel that the music has worked well in the background and made the documentary flow much better than it did previously because it covers sound cuts and makes the changes between camera angles much more fluent and natural.

Censoring

 I decided to censor the Woman's face in the charity shop because it fits the conventions of documentaries.

These are the settings I used for the censoring the woman's face. I had to change the position, the amount of blur and the radius of the censoring.

I had to split the scene because there wasn't an option to use the censor tool for a certain duration.

Music

I've composed 2 backing tracks in Garage Band with the help of my brother Sam. Track 1 is a more upbeat happy track which I felt would show his forced happiness in contrast to the sadness that track 2 showcases.
Track 1
Track 2

Track 1

I selected a hip hop drummer because I thought it would suit the theme of the music I was looking to make and would be quite upbeat. I felt that the drums did become too prominent so I used the beat but changed the instrument to a crate digger, which toned the 'shells' down.

I used these instruments because I felt like they worked well together and enforced the beat and are typically used in the upbeat backing tracks found in YouTubers' videos.

I selected these notes on the acoustic guitar, they are all major chords in the C Major key, this was the foundation of the music that I created everything else to as I knew it would create an upbeat style song.

I selected these notes on the bass guitar because I felt that they were quite happy, but I tried copying the bassline from the piano melody, which didn't fit so I found something more simple and it was effective. I also increased the speed on the guitar to enforce this.

I looped the music until the end of the track where I progressively removed the instruments because I felt like it made it more simplistic which is what I wanted.

Track 2

This shows the instrument layout of the second track, which is a lot more simplistic. This was done for two reasons;
1. the removal of some instruments means that the dialogue is accentuated, making the atmosphere seem sadder.
2. I tried experimenting with strings and percussion, from the smart drummer and creating my own loops and using various string sections, but it sounded too busy and forced, and I thought emphasis would be taken away from the dialogue.

These are the same chords as in track 1, but they are minor variants, which means that the transition is easy between the two.

Reflective Comment: Although I'm not a fan of the music I produced I feel like it may be better in the background than no music in most cases. I also think it may suit the theme of the documentary and compliment it nicely. It was also a different experience to learn how to use garage band which I hadn't used before creating this music.

Colour Correction

I used some colour correction on the side angle scene to make it more accurate and similar to the other clips

This is what the scene looked like before

This what what I have edited it to look like. This is less saturated and bright which suits the other clips. Below is all of the colour correction I have done to make it similar to the other clips.

Newspaper Adverts

 I have changed the font on my posters for all text except the Heading because it's more of a logo than text. I changed 'The Untied Story' to have more space which makes the text more clear.

In this version of the Advert I elevated the text and to have the text curve around his hand.

In the version the newspaper advert I had the text more similar to the earlier draft where the text is more resting on his hand. I prefer this version because it fills up more space and I feel like the other one feels more empty 

I used the different fonts on this version of the newspaper advert but I still feel that the other one is better. 

Newspaper advert drafts

 I've made 5 newspaper advert drafts now and plan on showing them to some people to get feedback. I used an eraser tool around the edges of Sam in order to make the edges look less rough.

Colour Match

Due to the different angles some of the scenes looked drastically different

Below is a front angle scene which I wanted to match colours with. 

In the screencap below I used colour match tool for the side angle scene. I matched it with the scene above and it has made the scene look more similar and more colourful.

Colour Balancing

The image below is some footage before I used the Final cut feature of colour balance.

This image is after I've applied a colour balance. I prefer this because it seems less gloomy and more bright.

Draft Feedback

I've shown two people some of my footage to see how they felt about how smooth some of the cuts were and whether they needed changing. Both people felt that the cuts were much too fast so I have changed them to look more fluent. This was during editing before I considered it a first draft.

Documentary Audio Enhancment

I have gone through all of my audio clips and used the 'Auto Enhance Audio' option on all of my clips which has removed lots of background noise and vastly improved the quality of the audio. 

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Test Footage

I edited together a very rough draft with the test footage and rough logo I have recorded/designed. This shows a rough narrative structure and how I may put them together when it comes to the full thing. I wanted to test the transition for the title screen and I feel like the top to bottom push transition was very appropriate but for the final product I may change the speed of it. I also didn't edit in any music for the timelapse and the camera wasn't very steady. I'm going to look for ways to keep the camera more steady and find some appropriate music or maybe even create some. This is only the rough narrative structure and doesn't follow the storyboard as much as I want it to. I also didn't make Sam follow the script as much as he will in the final product.

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