Careers Event Feedback

I attended a creative careers event which was being hosted at our school so I could get some feedback from a variety of different people. I got a few on the 3rd draft of the documentary and some on my newspaper advert. The main bit or criticism on the documentary was that the colour on the side angle was too different to the rest of the footage of Sam in the shed. People did feel that the music was used effectively. For the newspaper advert people felt that the text needed to be marginalised. I hadn't noticed that the text was out of line. Some people felt that the title wasn't attention grabbing enough and needed to be larger or bolder to grab attention. Some people also felt that 'the untied story' had too much spacing between it. Some people also felt that the edges needed to be smoother so I am going to make changes accordingly.

Draft 2 Initial Feedback

I got some feedback on my second draft saying that the audio on the 'Getting to know me ep.1' clip was too distracting so I decided I would remove the audio on that clip entirely. I was also told that the clip of him standing outside of the shed felt a bit forced. I may include a clip of him talking outside of his house which would add some context and explain that he lives there. I was also told that I should add some scenes of him at work or in a kitchen because of how much he talks about it and possibly add some more cut aways because of how many of the same angle of him looking at the camera is used.

Newspaper Advert Feedback

These were the 2 favourites when I asked some people. Someone felt that the fonts looked a bit           unprofessional so I may change them at some point to improve the quality of the adverts.

I will most likely use this one because it was favoured by a majority and I feel like it's more 

simplistic as it takes up less room.

I will create another version of this advert with the other font in case it comes out better as it was liked by the others but I will most likely use the other one.

Small Group Feedback

I've shown my first draft to a small group of people and they all seem to have few problems with it. The main problem seems to be the lack of different locations and takes being too long. I was already going to fix this so I was expecting this and am going to film in more locations this weekend. I'm going to show the draft to more people to get feedback because there may be someone more critical and helpful.

Draft Feedback

I've shown two people some of my footage to see how they felt about how smooth some of the cuts were and whether they needed changing. Both people felt that the cuts were much too fast so I have changed them to look more fluent. This was during editing before I considered it a first draft.